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Review:Mnemosyne_Morrigan says:
Minor! My dear academica, you do make my day :)

Barty Crouch Jr. the unresolved character. Was he telling the truth during the first trial? Or was he lying from the beginning?

So many questions, so little answers.

And your story does not provide all the answers.

I could find it annoying, but I think it's well played. It would be to easy to lay out all the answers.

I love that you started with picturing Barty as a little boy. Not portraying him only as a part of the Death Eaters. It comes back to the very beginning. Barty was like any other kid, playfull and curious. It's natural for a boy to sneak around. And yet... there is something strange about his actions. Something that alerts us. And then there's the way Carlotta handled the situation - almost like every loving mother who just caught her child covered with flour ;)

Curiosity. Yes, the curiosity is the key. Subtly entwined within the plot. I would even dare to say it oozes out of Barty. He's curious about the magic, about the consequences of actions, about the dark side, about the power, about every little aspect of life and world. You impressively portrayed it with those tiny, almost unnoticeable blinks - like him thinking about making love to Margaret or the inner construction of Azkaban.

The distorted curiosity.

In your world Barty Jr. is scary, because he's disturbing.

I've read a few of your other works, but didn't have the chance to focus on four style and language... Well, ok, I did have the chance, just didn't do it ;) I will now.

Your style is really good. There's lightness and flow in it. You're not forcing or rushing anything. Description seems aloof and calculated, not drenched with emotions, but it perfectly fits in with Barty's demeanor.

Author's Response: I love minor characters. There's so much uncharted territory there. It's irresistible.

Barty is an enigma. He's playing games with everyone all the time, and he's got all this history that he can't seem to make sense of. I tried to play up the fact that darkness is there, lurking beneath his skin, even as a young boy growing into a young man--his snide thoughts about Margaret, the way he feigns innocence around his poor mother.

I do think he's quite disturbing. He clearly has a lot going on psychologically and he was forced to keep it down for a while because of his father's prominent image and name. I think it would drive anyone crazy, though obviously Barty really played up his betrayal. He's the closest thing to a male version of Bellatrix that I can come up with, which is why she intrigues him during this story.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked my style! I've worked hard on it over the past few years and I think I've really found my "voice" as an author. It's great that it worked well for you.

Thanks for yet another fantastic review!


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