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Review:Penelope Inkwell says:
Woosh! Creepy. I like the sort of seductive tone you give “Matthew”--it’s not really so much physical, but it’s a mental game. It’s interesting, because I don’t really care for him--he’s very impetuous. I mean, he’s a teenager, and what if Alice had gotten pregnant with a boy right away? Suddenly he’s a teen dad? Obviously he didn’t think that through. However, the fact that it seems like something he has no choice in later does give him a bit of my sympathy. It’s an intriguing beginning, and I’d be interested to see how it plays out, and where this “Matthew” fits into the wizarding world. :D Good job.

Author's Response: Hello!

Creepy? Yay, I like creepy. Creepy is what I write. :P

It's definitely a game for him, this character loves mind games. You don't really care for him in the beginning; he's pushing this dying girl, essentially being mean for no reason, and we can think of bad names for him. He's impetuous to a point, even he has a line he won't cross. And he has thought the baby thing through, he has a plan. You just can't know it. ;)

But he's been watching her and his plan for this deal has grown and become concrete, so it's something he can do.

I'm glad you feel a little sympathy near the end; the deal is binding, so unless she finds away to break it, neither has a choice but to go through with the deal (and his plan). He grows throughout the first chapter, he has his own family now, so he's not as... bad as before. :P You'll see that.

I hope you continue to enjoy this story. Thank you so much for leaving a review!


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