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Review:patronus_charm says:
Happy 200th review, Amanda! As a prior warning this is a phone review!

It's great that you love writing Snape, as I love reading your Snape! The backstory you provided for him was so touching and I really feel that I got to know him that little bit better by knowing his parents relationship and how he regarded them.

The scene between Snape, James and Sirius was really interesting. It showed great character development in all of them. Seeing Snape's thoughts in regards to the balance of power and lily was really interesting too.

I really liked the scene between Snape and Lily prior to the kiss. There I was thinking wow this actually works, they can be friends and revise over the summer together, why on earth didn't JK make this canon and then bam!

The prelude to the kiss was handled really well! It almost made me feel as if I should have expected it. I really liked Lily's reaction to the kiss though, it felt very her. Mature, yet the confusion about it was still there. I really feel for her having to placate Snape and James!

I think where Snape ended up going and what he did was fitting considering what just happened with Lily. It did make me wonder whether that gave him the final push or whether he was always destined for that.

The scene with Voldemort was perfect due to your wonderful characterisation! I really got the chills in that scene and it definitely made me fear for poor Serverus and what he had gotten himself into!

A wonderful chapter, and I can't wait for the next to see how the story wraps up! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Kiana, oh my gosh, you are too much. Thank you for coming by and putting the cherry on top! There were times when I never thought this would reach 200 reviews, and here we are :) Nowadays when I write something new the thought always crosses my mind--"What will Kiana think of this?" Haha. I adore you!

ANYWAY.

This chapter was tough. I don't particularly like writing Severus joining up with Voldemort because it's a part of his life that really flies in the face of my little shipper heart, and so I challenged myself to try to juxtapose Snape's fixation on Lily and his decision to become a Death Eater. It felt safe, and a bit comforting, to begin with him writing to his mother. Their relationship is a huge part of my head canon.

Yeah, I kind of meant for that scene to show that James has actually grown up and Severus really hasn't. He's still focused on getting the upper hand and getting the girl, and he doesn't really recognize that his way isn't the way to get to Lily's heart--unfortunately.

Yeah, Lily got a rough shake in this chapter, poor thing. On the one hand, maybe she's a bit naive for not realizing that Snape would continue to pursue her romantically once she let him in again, but on the other, I sympathize with her (and you!) wanting everything to work out without complications.

Yeah, I struggled with the idea of Lily's rejection being the last straw in this chapter. I think it would have been powerful, and yet it seems like Severus was headed that way in terms of his personality anyway. I think he sort of had blinders on because he didn't realize that his ambitions to master the Dark Arts wouldn't be something Lily was okay with. He thought somehow, in his brilliance, he'd figure out a way to make it all work. So in my mind, he made his final transition here to try to salvage what he could of his future.

Hah, glad you liked my Voldemort! He's tough to get down, especially in the dialogue, and I'm happy you felt like he was in character. I hope you liked the Marking, too--that process was one I really had to think through a lot.

Thanks so much for your lovely review! I'm about halfway through the final chapter now and hope to have it posted sometime soon.

-Amanda


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