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Review:AlexFan says:
What? What just happened? Everything just got shoved in my face and I don't know what to do with this. It was literally like, "here's a lot of information for you, deal with it!"

This chapter needs to slow down, a lot. It's always good to have drama in a story because it keeps it interesting but you can't just give all the drama all at once.

You switched from scene to scene so quickly I had no idea what was going on. One minute everyone was in the Great Hall, the next the Room of Requirement and then the Gryffindor common room. That's really confusing.

You need to slow down the chapter loads by adding in description and transition. You dropped some pretty big bombs there and everyone must've had a reaction but unfortunately your readers don't know what it is because you never show any of them and instead move on to the next scene.

This chapter could've spanned out over the entire story that way things get more complicated and it keeps everyone interested to see how everything is solved.

I don't think I've ever had this much drama thrown at me so fast before. I barely had time to register one incident before I was rushed off to another one.

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