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Review:AlexFan says:
hey! I'm here with your very late review but I'm here for it!

The first thing that I want to mention is that it's really strange to hear Harry use words like ensure and stuff. It just seems so out of character for him but I suppose that's because I've gotten really used to hearing him be all relaxed. I suppose he changed as time went on though and became a little more serious.

The thing that I really noticed about your story is that you have great pace and transition. The chapter doesn't go by too fast and scenes don't cut off resulting in the flow being disrupted.

When changing point of views it's often hard to make the characters sound different but you managed it really well. There was no mistaking Hermione for Harry or Ron.

My favourite thing would have to be Harry smashing that globe. I think it's a really clever idea on getting a group of people together for an emergency meeting.

You've got a good balance between description and dialogue (as you always do) and I like how you establish the setting first and then get into the dialogue so that the reader isn't left wanting more from either.

The character that you got the most spot on is Hermione though. She was very proper and organized and the moment when her character really shined through was when she was asked whether the memory would be lost and she rolled her eyes. It reminded me of so many times when she would look at Harry and Ron like they were both idiots.

And last but not least, Hermione and Ron might not want to brush off what Fudge said about bugs that easily. Even if someone isn't always in their right mind they're often talking about something no matter how nonsensical it is.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I'm sorry about the delay in replying. It's been hectic here.

Since Harry would be in his 30s at this time and the Head Auror, I tried to imagine how his demeanor would have been. Given his high rank, I suspect he would talk one way while at work and another when he's off the clock.

Making up that globe that Harry smashes was pretty fun. :)

In regards to Fudge... You've stumbled on a clue... :)

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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