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Review:Mnemosyne_Morrigan says:
Why I found this story so late?!

Now I feel that time, when I wasn't reading it, is wasted. Diving into this story in some odd way fulfilled me.

It's powerful.

And the repetition of "He was coming" is like a resounding sound of bell, that augurs the inevitable.

You captured and abducted me into this dark, bitter, yet amazing world. Yes, the darkness is significant. Not only in those shadows of night and danger, but within Dorcas. She's waiting for death, but at the same time she IS death. Each word you've put, I felt it like an emotion. Every one of those words had it's own meaning, own life. As they took away her life and hope. The atmosphere you've created made me conected - like I could feel her trembling, her gasps, her heartbeat.

I'm a sucker for descriptions and your style amazes me. You paint the story so vividly. I never saw Diagon Alley in the way you describe it. Thrilling.

For some incomprehensible reason, I chose a favourite line. And it's not "He was coming" ;) It's simple, but for me charged with bitter, dying emotion:
"the way her heart beat slower each day, like the dying of a metronome"

Author's Response: This's one fo the biggest compliments someone has every given me that my little story fulfilled them in some way. Thank you so much. I'm really pleased that you felt so as i've always felt that this one-shot was a bit too hazy for people to really love or enjoy. It's always a surprise to me to hear that someone really felt the story i was writing. This was no surprise and i'm really pleased that you felt everything that Dorcas was. That was important to me with this, that everything she's experiencing and how far she is falling but not quite giving up the reader was right there with her on the roller coaster.

I'm pleased you enjoyed how i discribed diagon alley. I can imagine it beign a dark place, especially in times of war where the shadows grow deeper and the darkness spreads. Something that many on this site and who read probably associate with light and brightness as it was Harry's first introduction to the world is now changed. I find that to be quite impacting for myself to see the darkness take over. It's like innocence lost in a way.

Thanks you so much or not only the review but for nominating this story TWICE for a Dobby. I really, really appreciate it!!

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