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Review:AlexFan says:
Hello! I'm here for the review battle!

What I loved about this chapter was the innocence in it. Lily and Remus have no idea what they're going to go through when they get to Hogwarts, they're just so excited to get to go. You really brought out the excitement that each of them felt about being magical.

I also love that you show a little bit about Petunia. Most of the time it's never mentioned why she is the way that she is but you give little snippets of her feelings here and there that make the readers understand why she's a little bit bitter.

Point of view changes are difficult to pull off because more often than not, they disrupt the flow of your chapter and can be a little bit awkward but you pulled it off really well. I liked getting to see things from Remus's and Lily's point of view.

The description was great as well, you had enough to keep the story interesting and give the reader a picture in their head about the setting and the feelings that the characters had, but not enough to bore someone to death.

Really well done job on this chapter!

Author's Response: Hi AlexFan! Thanks for the lovely review and sorry for such a late response!

I'm glad you thought I portrayed their excitement well :) I wonder if they would all have still been so excited to go if they had known what was to come. I'm really enjoying writing the innocent years before the war really starts. Unfortunately it won't be long before the darkness starts infiltrating the story :(

I am so glad you liked Petunia in this, the downfall of Lily and Petunia's relationship will come up quite a bit in this story, so I hope you enjoy my interpretation of it :)

I'm so pleased to hear that you thought the point of view changes were done well and that you liked seeing both Remus and Lily's experience :)

I remember struggling with this chapter (I wrote it in 2006!) and worrying about how much detail to include about their trip to Diagon Alley, so I'm really glad you thought the descriptions were great and it was interesting :)

Thanks again for the great review :)

Haronione ♥

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