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Review:800 words of heaven says:
Hello! Here from Slytherin review tag!

I know I should've reviewed something a bit newer, especially as you have this story listed as abandoned, but I couldn't help myself - I adore CS Lewis!

I would love to see you have another crack at this! I think you have a really fresh idea - anything with a crossover is fresh to me, because I don't read them that much. However, the way you've set the characters up here - it seems as if practically every Potter or Weasley person has had a little book adventure! And I'd love to read about James' adventures, mentioned here in passing (I'm not sure if this actually another story that I can read - I'd love to give it a go!) If nothing else, I could totally see this as a short story collection, detailing the adventures of each of the people mentioned here, although what you have here with Lily seemed super promising! The concept kind of reminded me of Jasper Fforde's stuff.

I should probably have read something newer before I read this, so I could give some proper feedback, seeing where your writing is now, but based on this story, I think your writing has a lot of potential! There is a bit of a lack of description (I thought they were at the Potters' house until you mentioned the Room of Requirement, and then I had a moment where I thought the Room of Requirement had moved...) and the flow felt a bit off. However, I think you have a very active imagination, and I'd love to see more of this!

I'm not sure if I've convinced you to continue - either way, I wish you the best of luck with your future endeavours. Write on, dude!

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks 800 words of heaven :) yeah I wrote the start of this story at three am. When I get the time I will start this all over and I plan to redo this story. I actually was working of the collection of the crazy adventures with all the Potter's and Hermione in Oz. I actually have the long story of Albus inside Wonderland. I know the description is poor at best so when I do go back I will have loads to add. I do have QUITE an imagination.. I have just one more chapter to keep you happy for now though :/

I think you have convinced me to take another look and I will keep on writing something :)


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