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Review:lovethepotters says:
Why hello there Lauren! I thought I'd come and check out some of your work, and I'm so glad I did!

This is such a cute and lovely one-shot!

I think you wrote the quidditch match really well - the action seemed effortless, so kudos to you! James lunging in front of both the bludgers seemed very in-character and believable too!

But I think what I liked the most was the Hospital Wing scene (yes, I am a sucker for JILY haha). The fact that Lily came and was chatting to an unconscious James was all very cute :) Of course James can't remain angry at Lily for too long, considering he's madly in love with her. I think you've conveyed that part really well!

I actually said "aw" when I read the following lines, they were so fluffy:

'Well, someone will have to tell Hannah that my heart belongs to somebody else. It has done for a long time now.' James looked at Lily meaningfully.

'It's okay, Lily. I'm not expecting anything. But just know I'll always be waiting for you you know, if you ever did change your mind.'

Cuteness overload!

The only thing I have to say is that I wanted to yell at Madam Pomfrey for shooing Lily out of the Hospital Wing!

Have you considered extending this one-shot? Because I honestly can't wait to read about the party next! :D

I couldn't pick up on any grammar mistakes so you've done well on that front as well! Thanks for the entertaining read Lauren, I thoroughly enjoyed myself!

Tara :D

Author's Response: Hi Tara!

Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving such a lovely review!

I'm so happy to hear you thought the Quidditch scene was good. I found it really hard to write so it ended up being a bit shorter than it might have otherwise been. I'm glad the action was still there though.

Haha the pair of them are just too cute. I'm a massive Jily fan myself so I throughly enjoyed writing the Hospital Wing scene!

I'm glad you liked them two lines. I was melting a little inside imagining James same them.

I have considered as you're not the first person to say that. I may do one day but I'm not sure. I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to suggest it though.

Thanks again for leaving such a lovely review! I can't tell you how much I appreciate it!

Lauren :)


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