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Review:patronus_charm says:
Team Blue calling in!

Iíve always had issues with Lily II, probably because Iíve always had issues with the original Lily and Ginny, but I really liked your characterisation of her here. There was something fresh about her and the remarks about her mother were really nice and grounded her in some way.

I was a little unsure about the whole situation at first as to whether they were actually battling or what was really going on, but then when you revealed it was merely a game I rather liked it. It kept the suspense and curiosity going and it was a great way to introduce Albus into the story!

One thing I was a little unsure of was whether this was a game between them, an organised thing or just a fun thing. I liked the idea of it, but the concept was a little skewed so perhaps if there was a greater clarity about it, it would make it even better because Iím still a little confused.

Other than that I thought it was a really fun one-shot! It had the right levels of action and fun to balance out the description and you found a really great balance here! Good work!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked my characterization, and I think that it's better than my plot sometimes.

I think I'm going to have an introductory paragraph put in, from McGonagall or something, to say what the game is. I'm happy you liked it overall!

Thanks for reviewing


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