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Review:MC_HK says:
Oh man oh man oh man! I love reading this! I think you've got an awesome cast of characters, all with their own awesome personalties and you have a real knack for description. I'm normally not a huge fan of when people write background stuff because it sounds like it's just there as a filler, but you really make it work with your story. I know you're putting your heart and soul into this because it all seems so calculated. Everything works together perfectly, and the events that you've come up with are so good I am literally almost at a loss for words. And the interaction between Scorpius and Rose, aah I wanted to die (in a good way) hahah

There are a couple grammar/editing issues I think you should take in to consideration.

"send you straight to Azkaban like you belong" should be "where you belong"

"but she forced myself calm and climbed out of bed" Uhh, I don't really know what you wanted to say with this, but I can tell it's been a little mucked up in the editing.

Other than that, you have an amazing chapter and I really hope you re-request soon! :) MC_HK

Author's Response: Wowowowowow thanks for noticing! I'm grinning right now! The hardest part about this story has been incorporating background in a way that isn't 'dull', as I've never been good with description before. I usually don't have much at all, but this has been a new experimental writing style for me. I'm glad you like the characters :)--they're kind of a make-it-or-break-it factor in stories. That Rose and Scorpius scene took FOREVER to write so I'm glad it was good. First time writing romance, so not sure where I'm going to go with it yet. Do tell me how I do :)

I'll be fixing the edits soon. Thanks for catching them! Initially wrote this in first person and then changed, but yeah, some things got mucked up in editing. Thanks again and I plan to read the rest of your story soon as I do like it (and leave a nice and rambling review!)

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