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Review:PhoenixPulse says:
Oh, that was sweet of her, Lily teaching James how to do math. And then James with his horrible puns and jokes that make her laugh and me smile none-the-less.

Gawd, Kayla...You write them so wonderfully.

But despite the fluffiness of it all, is it bad that I sort of got that sinking feeling around the part when James talks about the Mathsive Maths War? Particularly with this:



"Of course I would. I would die in battle of course, and I'll be forever remembered as the Mathsive Maths War Hero. I'll have a whole castle built in my name with different times tables on each door," he said without missing a beat.

"Really die in battle? That's the way I was going to die in the second Mathsive War," she said, biting her lip to hide her smile.

James clasped her hands in his and said solemnly, "We'll die together. As a duo and we'll each have a castle named after us. It was a grand fight and we'll be remembered forever, never you worry."

Lily replied just as solemnly, "It was a pleasure fighting with you, Mister Potter."

"And you, Miss Evans," he said, bowing.




I don't know...It just sort of pierced my little happy balloon that was swelling with joy...because it was sort of like warning bells in my mind, reminding them that they really were going to die...together. And that they truly were remembered...

GAWD KAYLA! WHY?!? why must you hurt me like this? :(

Ah well, it was a beautiful chapter none-the-less. And that's why I love your writing! :)

Author's Response: First thing you need to know about me is I LOVE PUNS. So all these jokes/puns made me actually laugh as I was writing them.

#imsocoolwhat

haha, glad to hear that I write them well! It's scary trying to write them, because what if you get it wrong?! D:

Yes, yes, I put that in there exactly for that purpose. I was laughing but really sad at the same time because fORESHADOWING?! D:

I'm sorry for hurting you, I don't do it on purpose. (Okay, maybe I do it for a little bit but that doesn't mean I like doing it, haha!)

Thank you for this amazing review!

(Also, I'll send over chapter 2 of Superheroes next week. Maybe on the weekend. But definitely next week some time! :D)

- Kayla. :)


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