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Review:lovethepotters says:
I saw your story needed some loving, so I'm popping back with a review! Hope you don't mind :)

I know this might seem really weird, but I just want to jump up at and yell at Melanie, "LUKE ISN'T RIGHT FOR YOU!"

Ahem, anyway...I think I've already mentioned this before but I have a sneaking suspicion you're going to pair up both Melanie and Sirius. I think they'd be adorable together :) But I'm just wondering, if that were to be the case, how would Mandy take it? She obviously wasn't too pleased when she saw Sirius with Persephone, I can't imagine what her wrath would be like if one of her best friends ended up going out with the guy she liked.

Also, I like how Melanie is able to pick out flaws in Sirius' character. It's refreshing to see :) Most of the OC girls I've read tend to fangirl over him too much but I love how Melanie just keeps Sirius honest.

I'm afraid I have a little CC: I appreciate you wanted to add in Mandy's birthday into this chapter but for me (maybe I'm just weird so feel free to dismiss the suggestion if you think it's appropriate) it seemed a little abrupt and odd to include in this chapter. Considering you spent a fair amount of time talking about James' birthday, it seems a little out of place that Mandy's birthday is only mentioned in little snippets. In terms of flow, I think you should have either ended with James' birthday party or extended Mandy's birthday a little.

I hope my comments don't put you off (please do continue writing this story, it really is amazing), I just thought I'd offer some suggestions. Sorry for the terribly long review, I hope I haven't waffled on a lot!

Author's Response: Hahaha, of course I don't mind!! It's so lovely to see a review on this story - and one as long as this - so thank you!!! ♥

Poor Luke :P Your comment made me laugh! He is a nice guy... but yeah, there's not much of a spark with those two.

As for your theories/questions about Mandy... I love that you're wondering about these possibilities, but my lips are sealed! I don't want to give anything away!

I'm so glad to hear Melanie is a refreshing character. And yeah, she's not the type to be fangirling about a Gryffindor - they may be friends, but they are still rivals, so she speaks her mind! ;)

Thanks for pointing that out about the birthdays. I added a mention of Mandy's in there just because that's when her birthday was, but I didn't want to go on about it because I thought there were already way too many birthdays in the chapter and that it might be boring to read about another! I may just delete Mandy's altogether since it was a pointless scene.

Anyway, I really appreciate your review (and no you didn't waffle!) Thank you so much!!


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