|Review:||teh tarik says:|
Maggie! ♥ Oh my goodness, Maggie. This story. This. I don't really have a lot of words, but this is easily one of the best House Cup entries I've read so far, if not the best. Honestly, this is such a complex and compelling story, and is exactly how a Founders Era fic should be written. The small details here and there really give a very realistic sense of the physical and the historical setting, and your characters! Gaah! your characters are absolutely fascinating. They're complex and endearing, and both childish yet wise. Sorry for all the fangirling; I'm still a little speechless here.
First, Godric. Right, your portrayal of Godric (and Helga as well) is now my official headcanon of these two. He is such a responsible and yet curious boy, wanting to be a good son to carry on the Gryffindor legacy and maintain his family's honour, even though he is beleaguered by a condition (having magical blood), which sets him apart from his household. (It's interesting, but are you implying that Godric is Muggle-born? This is such a fantastic idea!). But there are other nuances to his character as well; his weakness is his pride, and he's aware of the divide in their social status, which sometimes causes him to belittle her own abilities and intelligence - not intentionally and certainly not maliciously, of course. Helga couldn't understand; she was only a girl, and a common one. These are such telling lines, and details like these really give a good sens of the social class divisions and mentalities. His relationship with Helga is very intricately written and incredibly well-thought-out. You've captured everything so convincingly, from the budding awkwardness and coolness between him and Helga as they slowly grow older to the resentment and bickering and the increasing gap in their understanding of each other.
That final part where Helga is immobile and sick, which leads him to carry her back down the steep path and take the broad path as she'd originally advised was so so good. The encounter with the seer was very interesting as well; the seer didn't so much as reveal any information, but instead gave him and us the readers, something to think about, something to reflect on about the futures of both these children - after all, we know that these two are going to be half of the great Founders of Hogwarts. And my absolutest bestest favouritest part was Godric when he was given the one chance to ask anything at all about his future, and he chose to ask something so simple and childlike and absolutely compassionate as "Will Helga be all right?" ;KALSHJPIUASJDLKHA ← sorry, I got too excited. You've depicted their friendship so beautifully! I sort of guess that these two will be firm friends and nothing more...maybe because I know you ship Helga/Salazar (and so do I :) ).
And HELGA OMG. SO MANY THINGS about Helga just made me smile. Helga had always had a sense of where to find things, without knowing exactly why. Hufflepuff :) She's so wise and yet instinctual and with a bit of a temper as well. But he saw no resentment in her eyes as she looked at him. Helga forgave easily. Such simple beautiful lines, and very characteristic of Hufflepuff herself, who is known for her tolerance and compassion.
It's such a shame that this fic doesn't have as many reviews as some of the other House Cup entries; it certainly deserves them! I would say it's because of the length, but honestly, I enjoyed reading this very much, every word of it. Your narrative is so smooth and graceful and your characters are written with such empathy. Amazing work, Maggie. I can't wait to read your other longer works! ♡ ♡
Author's Response: teh. I am speechless. Actually, I've been speechless for a few days now, but I think it's high time I attempt to respond coherently to this review :)
As you might have gathered, it was really hard to cram this story into 5000 words. I had to cut some things, so I tried to stick with the most necessary physical details to keep. And description has never been my strongest suit. But I am so happy I was able to set a good, clear scene for you! That was one of the main things I was nervous about with this, so it's great to hear I pulled it off reasonably well :)
And Godric. I did not expect to feel so close to him as I was writing this. You've got it right on: he does want to be a responsible leader, but he's got this fantastical side that he struggles to keep down. And such pride. I imagine that these characters are the same Godric and Helga that appear in my other Founders fics, and Godric's pride plays a bit of a role in Down Comes the Night. (And to answer your question, yes, he is Muggle-born :) )
I'm so glad you liked Helga! She's my favorite! I wanted to give her sass and compassion all at once. And she does have abilities that other people don't quote understand (like her innate sense for finding...Puff pride!) And yes, she and Godric remain best friends. Of course, I have to leave things open for Salazar to come along :D
You're probably right about the length turning people off from this, but I sort of expected that :P. I'm just glad you enjoyed it so much! Thank you again for all your kind words...I'm just completely giddy over this review! It's such an honor to hear praise from you, since I'm so in awe of your talent. Alskdjdjk thanks again!