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Review:nott theodore says:
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I really enjoyed reading this story. Your portrayal of Lucius Malfoy was interesting and I've never actually seen a similar characterisation of him in any of the stories I've read on here before. There was real depth and complexity to his personality and I found it very compelling to read.

One of the things I enjoyed the most was the fact that you portrayed two very different sides to his character. On the one hand he seems very dedicated to Voldemort and has no thoughts or cares about killing in his name. I was actually surprised by how much I liked reading about him that way; I think because we know that the Malfoys get let off at the end, it's easy to think that they're all sorry for what they did and tried to become better people... but life isn't like that. Since Lucius joined up of his own free will and continued with the Dark Arts even when Voldemort had disappeared, I find it quite believable that he never regretted anything he did.

The other side of his personality really conflicted with his support for the Dark Arts and Voldemort. It is clear in the books that he truly loved Narcissa and Draco and cared about them, so it makes sense that they were the cause of him trying to avoid Azkaban and have more care for his safety. The thoughts that he had about Narcissa when he hadn't said goodbye to her were particularly poignant. I liked the fact that he tried to keep her in the dark as much as he could - he'd made his choice but tried to stop it from affecting his family and causing them to worry. It makes me quite sad to think that he failed miserably. But I thought this side of his character was realistic as well, and seems like a good explanation for his actions at the end of the battle.

I thought that you wrote the speech very well. The dialogue seemed natural and consistent with the characters we see in canon at the same time, so well done with that. I liked the ending; the fact that you hid the identity of the man walking in the graveyard until the end left me guessing, and I felt satisfied with the conclusion that Draco seemed to arrive at.

I just noticed one typo in this piece:
"there is nothing Narcissa loves to do more than to threat about his safety." -- I think you mean 'fret' rather than 'threat'

Overall, this was a really enjoyable story. Your writing style is very readable and I found it interesting and realistic - well done!

Sian :)

Author's Response: My goodness, this review ... I am at a loss for words.This was wonderful to come home to, thank you so, so, so much! I'm really glad to hear you liked the story.
I am beyond happy to see that my attepmt at writing - and even simply understanding - Lucius Malfoy came across. You said everything I wanted my readers to understand. Lucius to me had always been an incredibly interesting character - I always saw him as the man that Voldemort wanted to be (when he first started the Death Eaters). His bloodline is the most pure of all wizard families, he came from a lovely home, he was extremely proficient at the Dark Arts, and beyond clever - and, along with his blood, he also had something else Voldemort could never have - love. Yet that wasn't really discovered by Voldemort until the forth and fifth book, and his attitude towards Lucius grew sour. I felt sorry for Lucius, really - he was a man who signed up to the Death Eaters when he was young and ready for anything, only to regret his decision later. That said, I find that the Malfoy's are quite romanticised. They had everything, and made sure everyone knew they had everything - in their eyes, they were immortal (the mere name, Malfoy, was immortal) - and yet, by the end of the books they were mortal, and in mortal danger, because of Lucius' brash and arrogant past. But I don't think he has the forsight to look back and regret - he always struck me as a man too proud, and I'm glad you see that too.
I'm glad you said that it explained his actions - this makes me very happy. He did fail with everything he tried to achieve, but in the end, Lucius was a great father and husband. That's really it, but I have no doubt his love for Draco would have rivalled Lily's love for Harry.
Oh, and I will definately fix that error - I knew that sentence sounded weird ...
Thank you so much again for your review. I'm afraid this response doesn't even do it justice. Thank you a million times over!
- Mahalia


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