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Review:lovethepotters says:
Here for the review tag!

I think you've got some really nice imagery in this chapter - I feel as though I can perfectly picture all the scenarios in my head!

I like how you've made Albus a Slytherin - it's a nice change from the stereotypical Potter in Gryffindor :) It's also nice to see Aaliyah as a strong-willed main character. I haven't found many stories like this so it'll be interesting to see where it goes!

A word of CC: As I'm sure you've noticed, you have some errors in grammar (e.g. spelling, tenses) which disrupt the flow in the story. If you manage to fix these up, the story will flow better :)

I think that's all I have to say - a solid start, it'll be interesting to see how Aaliyah and Albus' relationship unfolds :)

Author's Response:
Hi! For some reason I always see Albus as a Slytherin. That's why I wrote him as one. :O Aaliyah is a character that I stays true to herself no matter what. So that's why she came out strong-willed.

It's great that you can picture all of it in your head. Imagery was something I wanted to get right but at the same time not overdo it. And I officially have a beta to help me catch those mistakes. The edited chapter is in the que and the CC was helpful.

Thanks for the lovely review.
And Albus and Aaliyah's relationship is going to be veryyy interesting. ;)

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