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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hey Dan!

So I actually started writing this review several times, didn't know what to say and just gave up after staring at it for ages! But here it goes!

I have no idea what to say! It makes sense now that they don't run away together on an unicorn, like I had imagined in my head, but boy did that go downhill fast!

I actually really loved the chapter, especially the part where Astoria just knows it's Draco! My mom once told me that we recognize the people we love no matter what and that just gave me the warm fuzzies! :)

I like how you just make things more and more complicated. I am anxious to see how Draco digs himself out of this one. I can't see a way out just yet.

One thing I like that you really brought back to our attention is the fact that even though Draco is only a couple of years older than Astoria, he has been through so much and has seen so much and that changed him. The "Marked" Draco wouldn't think twice about it, but "Detox" Draco wants to do right by her. I guess being disillusioned by his parents and seeing his whole lifestyle crumble before him made him open his eyes! But Astoria is so young and in so many ways still a child. Case and point, her interpretation of his refusal of her advances. And at that age, her reaction makes sense. Because even though she wants to understand him and be supportive and everything, she has not seen it or lived it. She is sheltered and Draco wants to keep that, that little pink bubble around her. At this point, in my opinion, Astoria is just trying so hard to break that bubble.

The end of the chapter just broke my heart, it was so emotional to see her going from that anger that we all get when we fight with somebody and we say just the things we know will get on the other's nerves (I do it all the time, myself) and then when we cool down we realize it would've been best if we kept our mouths shut! I think the saying was "It is better to say nothing and be thought a fool than to open your mouth and remove all doubt.".

I can't wait for the next update! This was such a beautiful chapter and I can't wait to see what you have planned next for these characters!

Ral

Author's Response: Hi, Ral!

I've definitely been in that situation where I couldn't quite come up with the right thing to say in a review. Or much at all, for that matter. I'll take it as a compliment. :)

There were bound to be bumps in the road as Draco and Astoria make their way to Happily Ever After, and this was the biggest so far. You're absolutely correct that the relatively minimal age difference between Draco and Astoria and magnified enormously by the difference in their life experiences. The difference between "Marked Draco" and "Detox Draco" is huge. He's come to realize that a lot of the things that he though were important before the war really don't matter so much. He looks back at his former self and he wishes that he could go back to being that naive young man who didn't know anything about darkness and death. In his eyes, Astoria still lives in that same sort of state of grace that he once took for granted. He doesn't want to see her forced to grow up the same way that he had to during the war. It's an unusually noble thing for him to be feeling.

Astoria comes to her senses relatively quickly. She's sharp that way. But you're right, realizing what she's done actually makes it hurt more. She certainly wishes that she hadn't removed all the doubt, at least from her own mind.

I'm working my way through the next chapter now. Astoria hasn't been easy to write. I'm hoping Draco will be a little easier. Thanks for all the support and reviews!


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