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Review:MC_HK says:
I'm beginning to be quite annoyed with Dorcas at this point. It's more in the respect that she seems like a hypocrite. She tells Lily to not pity herself, but all she's been doing throughout the story is pitying herself. If you want that to be her personality, I suggest you add in something that really explains why she's like that. Also, there's a part where someone nods their head no, but heads only nod yes. There's also a very confusing sentence in here as well, I can't find it right now, but I wrote it down as saying that it should say "he never will again." I think it said, "he never would again" but that doesn't make sense.

Looking forward to your re-request, MC_HK

Author's Response: Oh, I was waiting for someone to say so. Dorcas has about three phases in this story. The first part which was rather short, was conceited Dorcas. The Dorcas that thought she was on top of the world and nothing could stop her, all that nonsense. Then there's rebel Dorcas. She doesn't want to hear what anyone has to say, and she only cares about herself. This transfer happens when she finds out about her illness, and continues up until about chapter twenty, when she comes to the third stage. But, back to the point. Between the first and second phases, Dorcas' mood is very temperamental, and she doesn't exactly know what she wants. She gets annoyed when Lily pities herself because of all the things she has to go through. Whoo! Dorcas is a mess, we'll acknowledge that.

I should probably change it to shook, right? Shook their head no? And I will go back and search for that mistake after I do the previous chapter.

Thanks again for your review, and I'm looking forward to the next!

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