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Review:teh tarik says:
Helloo! I saw this on the Recently Added a couple of days or so ago, and read it but didn't have time to leave a review. (Actually, that's a lie, I was just...depressed to the point of not reviewing.. :P). So I'm doing that now, since a little time has passed and I think I'm feeling a bit better.

First of all, you are a brilliant author. I have yet to read any of your longer works, but the quality of your writing, the detail and the intricacy of your prose is just absolutely stunning. From that opening paragraph, some things are just written with such a striking clarity - e.g. the bit about the housemartins and the stucco and the description of that little brown parcel and what a stark contrast it is to the cold interior of Draco's house. And oh-my-gods the way you described the camera, the level of detail and just how loving and so carefully constructed that paragraph was. You really have a knack for noticing things, and for bringing out these details that make both a setting and a situation so realistic. I very much loved that phonebox scene with the shattered panel and the call girl business cards and everything.

And then your characters. ERHMYGHERD. Poor Scorpius struggling between worlds that don't belong to him, wearing his life like an ill-fitting skin. Honestly, it was so heartbreaking, the way his thoughts shift from the intense elation at receiving the camera to that momentary hope of possibly clinching an understanding of some sort with Draco, and then there's that depressing phone call with Rose who also inhabits a very different world to what Scorpius knows and it all ends in a depressing anticlimax which pretty much depressed all the light and joy out of me. Scorpius is so believable and so tragic as a character (I assume he's the same Scorpius as the one in Quantum Physics). I absolutely loved the way he swipes Cynthia's business card and takes it with him; I'm not sure whether he'll follow up with that, but either way, that's not the point. And you wrote some seriously impeccable teen angst. Not melodramatic, corny teen angst, but something that's so genuine and honest and raw.

Draco and Astoria are such a sad pair as well. I don't know if either are particularly happy with their own lives; Draco doesn't sound like it (in fact, Draco probably doesn't find it important).

Bashdliuyawenjclaks I absolutely loved this story. Your writing is just gorgeous and you do angst like I've never seen anyone on this site do it before. Amazing stuff, really.

-teh

Author's Response: Waah this is such a lovely review! You leave great reviews, teh - most of all, they're incredibly lovely, but they're also really insightful and perceptive and eee I don't think you can imagine the squeal of joy I actually let out when I saw this review.

Thank you so much! Awh, it was good fun describing the camera - it's the exact make and model of my secondary film camera (I usually use a more modern electric film one, but that doesn't translate as well to magic, haha). I inherited this camera from my granddad, and I'd wanted a good, sturdy old Eastern Bloc camera (to put it one way!) for ages, and...well, basically, Scorpius' thoughts are essentially the thoughts I had when I was presented with a dilapidated old leather case that had a Praktica MTL3 sitting inside. I'm glad you think the setting is realistic! I do like to notice things, actually, and I'm so pleased to hear it comes across in my writing. I got to base an entire art project on 'noticing things' earlier this year and it was fantastic. Playing the part of an observer is a little underrated.

Poor Scorpius indeed! I won't lie, this fic is very much based on real life experiences -- like Scorpius, here, I never see much point in moaning about my home life IRL, so writing something like this can be really cathartic. It keeps me healthy! I like that you picked up on the futility of him phoning Rose - like, I guess it is a happy moment in an otherwise miserable fic, but, at the same time, it reinforces a lot of the misery and...I'm really not very kind to my characters. Coincidentally, this isn't the same Scorpius as Quantum Physics, but it hardly matters, pretty much all of my Scorpiuses are the same character! This Scorpius is the same as the one in Starving Artists, my longest fic. He's a bit of a pathetic moper in that fic and I've always wanted to justify his moodiness.

And about Cynthia - I can tell you about that, because this is a scene I cribbed from an abandoned fic - he does keep the business card, and possibly puts it in his wallet, and possibly forgets about it, and Rose possibly finds it and gets upset, and possibly doesn't understand that Scorpius is keeping it as a memento of that phone call and not because he favours call girls or anything...tactful, right?

Draco's an odd character. I always struggle to write him properly, so I tend to default to the same tried-and-tested Draco no matter what fic I write. I figure that, at this point in his life, having lost his parents, his inheritance, his shiny manor, a lot of his social standing and, finally, having driven away his wife, he'd be sour as a lemon. But all hope is not lost: he has an okay relationship with Scorpius in the end!

Thank you so, so much for this review and all your wonderful comments! I want to embroider this on a sampler and hang it above my bed or something~ thanks again, and I'm so glad you liked it ♥ ♥ ♥


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