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Review:navyfail says:
Hi! I'm here with the review swap.

I do think this is a great beginning to a story. It shows a lot of potential and your characters seem interesting. I think the beginning was a tad confusing. The transition from the first scene to the next can be better.

One thing I think you pulled off is having an American in the story. Sometimes it feels too overdone or too much but you did it perfectly. Another thing is that you have a good balance of your characters. We see an even amount of Roxy, James and Finn. Right now I already have a general feel to their characters.

For coming chapters I would work on her back story. We don't see much of her past or why she is going to Hogwarts so I think adding in her story little by little through chapters will make it interesting and keep readers wanting to know more.

All in all, lovely first chapter. I have a feeling in story will be more surprising as time passes.

~Sama

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll work on creating a better shift between the two scenes! I don't want it to be too confusing for the reader! Awe, thank you! I'm glad you like Perri. I wasn't sure if the American student-thing was overdone, but I really wanted to try it out! I'm working on her backstory currently, so there will definitely be more of that coming soon! Thank you very much for the lovely review!
xx


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