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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I'm here with your review. :)

I don't really read many song fics, simply because I like to know the songs that the fics are based on, but I knew that anything you wrote would be good. I'm actually listening to the song as I'm writing this review. I've never heard it before, but your plot wasn't solely based around the lyrics, so I was able to understand the emotions that Sirius felt without needing knowledge of the song to validate them. Sometimes, song fics are cemented too closely with the plot of the story, and it makes it really difficult to read without having listened to the song first. It's as though, without the song, the story would vanish into thin air! This is not one of those stories. You've incorporated just enough of the lyrics to show your intention for the plot, but even without them, the story would still be really amazing and understandable. :)

I love how you examine Sirius' relationship with his friends, family, and motorbike as he storms off into the night. The emotions and thoughts are so real, such expected behavior from a character like him, that it seems as though this actually happened in the world that J.K. Rowling invented. That's really awesome, because seeing fanfiction that should be canon is like shaking hands with the Abominable Snowman--it's pretty rare. :P

The adventure that Sirius went on, and the bit of Muggle-baiting that he did, were absolutely spot-on. I could see the night, his burning anger, the "doorknob" in the Jaguar. When I read the words, I was there. You have such powers of description, and yet, it was so interwoven with action that nothing ever stagnated. I'm still trying to figure out how to do that consistently, and I could definitely take lessons from you!

Also, I just wanted to comment on the amount of humor you put into this, even though it was supposed to be angry and filled with rage. The part about the Healers, the competition within the Black family to Death Eater-ize their children, the "doorknob"... It struck me as funny, but it all fit within the tone and style of this piece. Perfection!

You don't need me to tell you that you're an amazing writer, but I will anyway: YOU'RE AN AMAZING WRITER!!! :D

This piece seems very different from the stories I've read of yours in the past, but it's different in a good way. You're so versatile that changing styles must be just like changing shoes for you. (At least, that's from MY perspective...) Wow. Just... Wow. :)

May your pen never run out of ink!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi, there! And seriously, you're making me blush here! So many nice things you had to say, I don't quite know where to start. Perhaps at the beginning.

I usually don't like song fics, either. But something about this song and the way it paired with Sirius in "one of his moods" just spoke to me. The song itself is a favorite of mine. A lot of Priest songs are. I'm dating myself horribly, I know. ;) I'm glad that you felt like the story more or less stood on its own. That was the effect I was shooting for.

Back to the point of Sirius being in "one of his moods", I imagined that his thoughts would wander a bit once he calmed down a little. Every kid wants to have a normal relationship with their parents and siblings. I think that's a universal thing. That was never really possible for Sirius, and to me it's always seemed like that bothers him a lot more than he ever let on.

I loved every second of writing Sirius's encounter with the rich guy in the Jag. It was boundless fun. You'll always find humor in my stories, even the darkest among them. It's just part of who I am and how I deal with life, so I write the same way.

Aww, I really appreciate you saying that! And I'm also glad you think I'm able to do a lot of different styles. Sticking to one thing for too long would get boring, I think.

Wow, this was just an awesome review! It totally made my day. I hope you don't mind if I share it in the Reviews That Made Your Day thread, actually. Thanks so much!


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