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Review:rozen_maiden says:
Hey, it's Mahalia from the forums with your RR.
This chapter was really quite good! Aside from a few grammar errors (nothing a beta can't fix), you introduced your characters very well. I didn't really find myself asking many questions about your OC or her family, as you seemed to explain everything - but, not all in one go. I find that many people will do this, and it feels like I'm reading an essay instead of a story, but I really didn't get that feeling with this chapter.

Stephanos sounds like an interesting character - it's not very often I read about pure-blood families who don't 1) involve themselves in Death Eater activity, and 2) interact with Muggles (obviously aside from the Weasleys). However, concerning this, you said that Stephanos was friends with Lucius Malfoy, which, isn't too much of a problem, but he's quite against anybody he knows interacting with Muggles (hence him calling the Weasley's 'blood traitors'). I hope that kind of made sense, and it really isn't too much of an issue, but just something to keep in mind with canon :) Maybe if you even highlighted that Malfoy was friends with Stephanos before he decided to live as a Muggle.

-Mahalia

Author's Response: thank you for the review, wil keep that in mind :)

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