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Review:rozen_maiden says:
Hey s2rocks, it's Mahalia here from the forums with your ridiculously late review (I'm real sorry about the delay).
So, I didn't review the first chapter and just went straight onto reading the second, just in case I pointed out things that were answered in this one (good thing I did to, this cleared up a fair bit).

First I'm going to talk about your OC, because she is pretty awesome. You've incorperated both aspects of her parents really well - she has the sense of humour of Lee Jordan, and though we never knew much about Alicia, I always pictured her as quite entitled and sensible in the books (not in a bad way). Ciara's attitude really encomapsses these two characters traits. Her sense of humour is also quite wicked - her sarcasm and wit are really enjoyable to read.

As for the plot, there were some things I found a little inconsistent - mainly the mobile phones. I know it's really hard because they are so handy to use concerning character communication, but I just couldn't picture wizards using them. The Potter's makes fair sense, if you highlighted that they had them for 'effective communication', or something of the like, but I found it hard to believe that Scorpius Malfoy would know how to answer a phone. Unless you explain why he knows, I don't think Draco Malfoy would ever have his son interact with a Muggle contraption like that, if you get me. As a suggestion, I think if you had Scorpius answer incorrectly (like shouting at the phone or pressing all the buttons on there, so all Ciara can hear is beeping), it would be a little more believable, and effectively explain that the Potter's and Ciara herself have really gone out of their way to learn how to use a phone.

The story itself is a great read. It's light-hearted and Ciara keeps you guessing what is going to happen next. It will be really interesting to see where you take her with James after what she said. You've done a real good job :)

-Mahalia

Author's Response: Thanks for the review (don't, it's not too late :)

I really loved the idea of a radio host, when I read about it and really wanted to try something that out. Ciara Jordan is a complete mixture of Jordan and Alicia that I have tried to describe in the story.

She is a prankster, troublemaker but she is studious too, that's why she was head girl. I thought of Alicia as smart and sensible because handling Lee Jordan, needs some good efforts like Angelina.

I wanted to show that after the war, the acceptance of muggleborn would have increased, which might have led to introduction of muggle technologies in the wizardry world. How Ciara is so familiar to them, is said as she told the caller that her best friend's mum was muggleborn and she might have learned a thing or two.

I really thankful that you liked the story and find it interesting. It will be more interesting in the next chapters, I hope that.

Hope you review again.


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