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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Oooh, this chapter was super exciting! There were so many bits that I loved about it, but I'll just point out my absolutely favourites, otherwise this review will probably be extremely waffly and boring.

Obviously I loved the scene in Dumbledore's office - you wrote their induction, I guess we can call it, into the Order really, really well! I loved how eager they all were, and I think I loved it even more when Beth was the first to say she was in. And once again you nailed Dumbledore on the head. I'm a bit puzzled about McGonagall though - why was she so against them joining, I wonder? Was she worried about her students' safety, perhaps?

I also loved other random bits and pieces from this chapter - glimpses we got to see of the characters and their lives. To me, they all seem like such real people now, and none of them have these over-exaggerated Mary-Sue like qualities which is always good!

I loved the little details of the scene in the common room you gave us - like Peter and Remus playing Gobstones and Peter winning (I have to mention that I rarely see Peter winning at anything, so it made a nice change) and James attempting to copy off Beth.

And then Sirius' arrival was just perfect! I love how long it took him to get to the actual topic, what with all of the interruptions, like Beth asking if his pocket was squeaking.

Amazing chapter!

Author's Response: Writing the Order scenes in ITB -- if you can call them that, because that's just a glorified way of saying "a lot of talking" -- were some of the trickiest, mainly because I thought they'd be too dull. :P I'm so happy to see that, for you at least, that wasn't the case! As for McGonagall, I responded to another review about this earlier today, but I think a lot of her reservation on wanting the young in the Order is because she's had these kids as students for 7 years. In the absence of a family of her own, she'd see them as her children, I think, and it would feel to her like a mother sending her children off to war, if that makes any sense at all.

Oh, I am SO glad my characters seem like real people to you! That's absolutely #1 in writing for me -- creating characters that come alive and feel real to the reader. ♥ I can't tell you how happy that makes me. I got so attached to every single once of these characters while writing that I always want to think other people are attached, too. And yet thinking that and actually hearing it are two very different things.

You're amazing. Your reviews are amazing. Thank you so much for them!!

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