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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi there! I saw your link and couldn't resist!

So I'm not entirely sure where this story is heading based on the description and the chapter titles, but I really like what I've read so far. You got so deep into Ginny and Molly's relationship. I think it would have been really difficult to write this if you weren't female. Not impossible, but really difficult. You did a great job of capturing the duality that she feels being a girl who grows up looking up to her six older brothers. Not trying to put words in your mouth, but it seems like she initially feels like her mother limits her while her brothers give her something to reach for. Then gradually, as she grows older, she begins to realize that what she got from her mother meant a lot more than just "girl chores" and awkward chats about how her body was changing. Molly gave her a very important part of her sense of self. The foundation of the woman and mother that she would become.

Your writing was really beautiful in this. Aside from the fact that I couldn't find a thing wrong with it -- no typos, spelling or grammar problems -- it all flowed really nicely. The chapter was paced really well and all of your descriptions were vivid and easy to picture. The narrator's voice really sounded like Ginny, that distinctive mix of irreverent and sentimental that I always think of with her.

I really loved the last section about the eyes being the windows to the soul. It was lovely and poignant and very true.

Great job!

Author's Response: Oh, wow, there you go. Apparently self promotion does work. I still can't believe that you clicked on the link - but thank you so much for doing so!

It's interesting that you say this would be hard to write if I were not female. I never really thought of it that way! But I suppose I see what you mean. And, no, you didn't put words in my mouth at all - what you described is exactly what I was hoping would come across!

Thank you so much for saying that you thought that I got Ginny's voice right. She's a tough character to write but she also comes very naturally to me, if that makes sense. I think I just found a voice and went with it and it fits the Ginny that I have in my mind, so it's always nice when someone tells me that they like her.

Thanks so much for this review!

Jasmine :)

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