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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello :) marauderfan here with your requested review!

This was an interesting chapter! What a stressful day for Ciara to have, worrying about the interview and then the interviewee not showing up! I'm beginning to understand Ciara's personality more, as I can see how she reacts to stressful situations. Also, I like that you're incorporating muggle technology into the wizarding world - it makes sense that after enough time, wizards have to adapt to the times and get a magic version of phones. After all they've done that before with the wireless.

Since you said you've already got a beta, I won't mention the grammar and instead I'll point out some other things. The flashback was a nice idea to show Clara's first day, but I'm not sure how well it really fits in that spot. The transition into the flashback feels rather clumsy. Maybe you could put it at the beginning of the chapter instead, showing Ciara's thoughts about her first day, and then something like "today was an equally big day" and then into the main part of the chapter.

Also, regarding the flashback, I think it'd be nice to show some of Ciara's emotions in there, since it's such a big deal for her. All we really see is her yelling at the caller, and I wasn't sure why. Maybe show what Ciara is thinking while on the air, the caller makes her nervous, etc.

Lastly, in the final line it says that Ciara would never have met James if she hadn't agreed to the interview. But earlier in the chapter you said that she had always been close with the Potter/Weasley family. If that's the case, wouldn't she probably have met James beforehand? Or when they were at Hogwarts together (not in the same year I realise, but they would have been at school at the same time). Just something to think about...

Ok, that CC got a little long-winded! I hope it helps, I'm really not trying to be mean! Good work on this chapter :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review

I wanted to show how Ciara actually reacts and act when she is under pressure and the interview was a big opportunity and if the guest is not present, I think it would freak anyone out.

I think it is about time that wizards adopt some muggle technologies and advance themselves.

Thanks for the suggestion about the flashback, I will see what I can do.

What I mean, is that she has never been officially or should I say very familiar with him. Ciara was shy first but as she is from a small family, a big family like Weasley freaked her out and it took her a lot to adjust.

We must remember that James is three year elder than her and he was in NEWTS year when she was just in fourth. So, he played for the Gryffindor team while she was just a normal, not so famous student.

Thanks for the help and suggestions.


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