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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! Here I am, all super-speedy with your review! :)

So you asked me if this opening chapter had the "interest" factor going for it... And in my opinion, it definitely does! You've got a funny little bunch of characters parading around under one roof, and yet they haven't gotten out of hand. What I mean by that rather vague statement is that your characterization is pretty solid for such a short opening chapter! You introduce Dani to us without really ever saying, "I'm Dani. I'm a triplet in Ravenclaw and I love Quidditch." Instead, you spread the information out, letting the reader pick up the parts that aren't explicitly stated. That's really awesome!! :D

The story flow is good. I loved Oliver's entrance--haha! They're going to have some crazy times ahead, I can tell. Triplets are pretty interesting groups of people, so I'm sure that Brandon will cause some havoc and Kat will interfere a lot. What are sibling for, after all? :)

The only little tiny details that were amiss were a few slips in capitalization, such as on the word "mum" when saying things like:

"I walked the dog for you this morning," Mum said.

If it's a name that you call someone, it should be capitalized. If the person is referred to in a possessive manner, it's just "my mum." No big deal.

Also, Pop Tarts are a brand name (I think), so they should always be capitalized. ...Now that I'm thinking about it, I really want some Pop Tarts! :P

But really, this was a very great start to what seems like a funny and awesome story. Great work! :)

May your pen never run out of ink!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thanks so much - especially for responding so quickly, you rock!

I'm glad you reckon it's got the interest factor. And I definitely know what your getting at with the whole characterization thing, as it was certainly something I was aiming for!

Ah, capitalization! Thanks for pointing those out, I'll go back and fix those up.

I'm glad you (seemed to) enjoy this chapter!
Courtney:)


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