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Review:CambAngst says:
That... was hard to read. I don't know why, but I was expecting this story to be longer. I was expecting Lydia and Sirius to have more of a chance before something awful happened. I knew that there wasn't going to be a happy ending to this. That just wasn't possible. But I wasn't expecting their time together to end so abruptly. I think it says a lot about how much of a connection you created with these two characters that the ending evokes such a sense of loss and feels so unfinished to me. Dang it, I wanted more! ;)

The pain that Sirius was suffering through was palpable as I read the start of this chapter. He knows that he should have been more careful. That he should have known that the Death Eaters would use Lydia to get to him. But he was too caught up in the moment. No matter what James says, he isn't going to stop blaming himself.

James was really well written. He was a good friend to Sirius, but you didn't overdo it and have Sirius crying all over his shoulder. I also liked their conversation about Remus and Peter, even if it did make me really sad. The cowardly, back-stabbing rat was clearly doing a good job of throwing suspicion off of himself and onto a more convenient target. Grrr...

I noticed one small typo near the beginning:

After much deliberation she had brought him to watch Indiana Jones in the end, even though it wasnít particularly her kind of film; s much preferred a good comedy or romance herself. -- film; she much preferred

Lauren, you did a great job with this story, start to finish. It was poignant, emotional, beautifully written and very gripping. Thanks for an awesome read!

Author's Response: Hi Dan.

Oh I'm feeling all guilty now for being so cruel and cutting their time so short but it was how it had to be. This was a Les Mis challenge after all.

I can't tell you how much I appreciated your comment about wanting more and how you felt I had created a good connection between them. Even though it was so short I really wanted to do it justice and that comment made me so so happy so thank you.

I knew it would be James who was there for Sirius but once again I was really happy you felt their exchange was believable and not over done. They're best friends but I couldn't see them crying over each others shoulders etc like you said.

I'm glad you picked up on the whole Peter/Remus part. That part just fell into place and I was so happy it did. I liked being able bring in that small bit of canon.

Again - thank you for the typo! I'm rubbish at spotting them once I feel a story is done.

Dan - thank you so much for all three of these lovely reviews. I've loved reading each one and the comments and CC has been really helpful so thank you!

Lauren :)


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