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Review:MC_HK says:
You don't have many grammar/spelling problems, and that makes you an angel :)

You've really done well with the character's personalities. I can definitely distinguish between all of them if you hadn't put their names in.

I do think that the beginning is interesting and keeps me wanting more. I like that you introduce all of your main characters right away, which helps me know who I'm going to be reading about later.

One thing do I feel like I need to comment on is the transition from first to sixth year. Maybe split this up somehow, because I don't think they work well together in one chapter. You could lengthen the end fo the first year bit, and then make the last half of the chapter a whole new chapter all on its own. To me that would make it flow better.

I'd say it does hold together, but it could do with a little more work. You've got a great foundation here, and I'm excited to see where you take it. Good day, MC_HK

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much!! I'm really glad the characterisation came across well, and that it's interesting, that's good to hear!

Yeah... with that transition I was attempting to do some sort of parallel between their first and sixth years, and I guess it just ended up being awkward. :P Thanks for addressing that, though.

Thank you for reading and reviewing!! :)

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