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Review:Owlpost68 says:
I think this was honestly your best work.
You made us all feel everything in this chapter, absolutely everything. Once Belle left for the bathroom alone, and because I had an inkling someone might die, I was all AAAHH NOOO DON'T DO IT!
But you're right. I think it had to be her. Something has to make Sirius go more mad/crazy and give him even more of a drive to help the Order.
When she did die, I had the irrational hope that maybe she'd killed whoever it was who said the wards were being broken, but I knew better. I think what really had me choked up though was how through his pain, Sirius saw Lily and Alice sobbing. That really got me. The thing is though, somehow I didn't start bawling because I know this is the one thing that will get everyone to join the Order.. really, nothing else would.
So, really lovely job, I can't imagine killing anyone off, but you were brave enough to for the sake of the story.
That's a true author.

These were the few errors I found, 'cause true authors have those too :)

they’re reading to go- ready

But I will not save you and of Mrs. Potter’s breakfast.”

- any

There might have been some grammar stuff, but wasn't too important, you nailed the important stuff.

Really excellent job!

Author's Response: Aww! That's such a huge compliment; thank you so much for your sweet words!

I think I made myself feel too much in this chapter, haha. I had to stop on those last few scenes and pull myself back together, then eventually just gave up and sat there crying/writing at the same time, haha.

I already addressed this in the PM... and your perceptiveness amazes me. I'm so excited that you put so many things together, and that you realized it had to be her, as well.

Sirius's section was the hardest for me to write. He just. he didn't deserve any more pain and ugh. I never thought I would care about Belle the way that I did, and getting Sirius to care about her the same way then taking Belle from him just felt so... cruel :(.

Oh my gosh, I don't know what to say about your true author comment. That means so much to me, and I'm so honored that you feel that way. I get really unsure about my writing and am positive half the time that people just read it to be nice, so that comment is one that's going to stick with me forever.

And thank you for the typos ♥ I'll go in to edit them out right away.

Thank you so, so, so much from the bottom of my heart! One more chapter! ♥


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