|Review:||Penelope Inkwell says:|
Aw, I enjoyed this chapter a lot :D
I think you’ve crafted your characters really well. Sometimes it’s so hard to find balanced characters--either they’re, like, irritatingly, impossibly perfect with no discernible flaws (or at least no interesting ones), or they have so many flaws that they’re completely unlikable. Ava and Louis, on the other hand, are flawed in a way that sort of makes them more likable. They keep you on your toes, and Ava, under all her bluster, really seems to have a good heart. But her snark keeps her intriguing and fun. In so many stories, the moody girl with the good heart is relegated to a supporting role, but I think Ava makes an awesome protagonist! And Louis is really well-layered as well. There’s still so much mystery to both of them, but everything we’ve found out so far makes perfect sense.
I had never before thought of how awful it might be from a Veela’s perspective! Sure, things might be easier for you, but you’d never know if people really liked/loved you, or if it was your supernatural physical mojo at work. That adds so much depth to his character, and I feel like we really see it at work in this scene. He really opened up before (Well, kind of. Largely in French, but still). And now he’s sort of backtracking, trying to regain some control and play it off, because he’s falling for her. But he already doesn’t trust normal relationships, let alone going after one with a girl who is still hung up on her ex!
...at least, that’s what I’m seeing. I could be wrong.
And Ava! I just love her all the more after these last few chapters. You can tell that she really loved Ian, and she let him go because she thought it was best for him. And it sounds like it was a hard situation for all involved, and whether or not she did the right thing is sort of a moot point to argue, but to me the most important part is that she TRIED to do the right thing, even though it obviously really messed her up. And then she did it again the second time, even when she already knew how badly it would hurt, because she had experienced it before. She was willing to break her own heart to save someone else from suffering, and was willing to be the one to make the hard decision. A lot of her character shined through. And then this scene, of course, was as well-written as ever, and it was a nice, cute, fun respite from all the (also excellently-penned) broken heartedness that has been going on.
Still loving it. Your writing is really, really good, and this story is so interesting. Please update soon.