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Review:marauderfan says:
Ahh! I'm excited to see you've got another WIP going, because I love your writing. And this is really cool. You've managed to do it again - pick a really obscure minor canon character and tell a very rich story.

The first thing that impressed me about this was Old Wendy, actually. I remember reading about some old hag selling fingernails or something in Knockturn Alley during HBP, and never thought much of her - but just the fact that you've made her a caring and lonely person with a back story is so impressive. She's so much more human now.

I also like the personality you've ascribed to Penelope Clearwater, who in the books is just "Percy's girlfriend" and nothing more. But here, I feel as if I've known her for years too.

Also, I'm so curious about Verity! The daughter of Burke (As in Borgin and Burke's), but I'm assuming this is the same Verity that later goes to work for Fred and George, which should be interesting to see.

And as always, you writing style truly is amazing. Your description flows so easily and naturally, it's poetic. I really liked the description of Verity sliding away from Sebastian "like rainwater over glass".

This is such a sad chapter, detailing the grief of Penelope's death and all the memories of her in the past, and how Verity and Sebastian's once idealised relationship has started to change in ways they don't like but it seems they're trying to ignore.

What a powerful opening chapter. You are amazing Lululuna :)

Author's Response: Hello! :) Ah, I'm so sorry for this late response, but this review was really lovely to receive and I'm very excited that you took the time to check out my other WIP.

I really enjoyed the character of Old Wendy as well, and I'm very glad she stood out to you. Knockturn seems like such a rich and unique place to me and I wanted to populate it with dogdy characters who have more depth to them than seems at first glance.

I'm glad you're enjoying the development of Penelope and her personality, and find her likeable. And that you're intrigued about Verity as well! She's such a fun character to explore and I'm glad you like her so far and are curious about her future.

Thank you so much for your lovely comments about my writing style! I'm very honoured that you enjoyed it. It was a sad chapter, and there's a lot more angst and reflection coming in future chapters, but I'm so happy you liked the chapter and the story so far! :) Thank you for taking the time to leave me a lovely review, it really made my day! :D

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