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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! It's me at last, here with the review you requested over a week ago! I'm sorry for the delay! :)

I decided to start by reviewing the first chapter so that I would know what was going on, and I'm very glad that I chose to do so! Your writing style is very intense and slightly mysterious--you don't have to TELL me everything in the chapter, because you've built in a whole lot of SHOWING, if you know what I mean. Overall, I thought that the style of this prologue was very dramatic and super intense, while being shrouded in mystery all the same. A perfect balance! :D

Ana seems like a very interesting, complex character. I am anxious to find out why there were people trying to kill her family, and why they burned her house down. Is she a Gryffindor? That's just a guess because there was a part about "a lamb rather than a lion." From the description of the story on its main page, I know that it's going to be a Draco/OC, which doesn't happen TOO often, and I'm very intrigued by their story as well as Ana's own. Good on you for writing a complex and awesome character! :)

Your description was top notch, and that's not all! Your sentence structure was pretty awesome as well! Spelling and grammar were totally on the mark, which I LOVE to see in fanfiction. I'm a bit of a stickler for grammar and such, and to see someone who obviously cares so much about the sensitivities of their readers' eyes and grammar penchants just makes me really happy. Keep up the great work in that area!

I can't wait to read more, so you be sure to re-request soon, alright? :)

May your pen never run out of ink!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Teehee thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it. It's so hard trying to find reviewers that really like the darker, action/adventure fics. I've put this story under so many revisions to make it just perfect, and your review helps me know that I'm doing something right! I will definitely re-request! :)

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