|Review:||nott theodore says:|
Wow, what a chapter!
The thing that strikes me the most with this chapter is the enormous contrast between the first and second sections. The beginning, with the visit to Azkaban, is so dark and horrible, then the carefree and happy nature of the snowball fight juxtaposes against the former so well; you made the perfect choice to include both of these scenes in the same chapter, as the stark contrast highlights the nature of both places and activities extremely skilfully.
The visit to Azkaban was hauntingly written. Some of the descriptions were almost beautiful (as beautiful as anything written about Azkaban can be!) and you communicated the feelings of dread and fear brilliantly. Orpheus was right when he said that it was no place for children, and I felt horrible at the thought of them going there, but it was still sweet of Tor to go along and support her friends.
I loved the fact that Tor's abilities in leglimency and occlumency offered her some sort of protection against the Dementors. I've never actually seen that written into a story before and it's very unusual, but I do like the idea. It would make sense as well, with Voldemort being so skilled, that he would be able to control them because of his abilities in those fields.
Your characterisation of Carrow was fantastic. She's such a horrible person, feasting (rather like a Dementor, so I suppose her presence in Azkaban fits) on the unhappiness of others and revelling in their misery. It's exactly how I imagine her to be from the glimpses we get of her character in the books. I was pleased to see Tor stand up to her though - could this be some sort of indication for what will happen next year, when the Carrows come to teach at Hogwarts? Although I imagine that a good Slytherin at that point would keep their head down and their mouth shut, something Tor may have trouble with...
It was devastating to see that Mr Nott didn't recognise his own children! I can't imagine what that must have felt like for the Nott boys, who have put themselves through such an ordeal to visit their only remaining parent. But I was pleased that Tor was able to help them by casting a Patronus, and it was sweet when it cheered Mr Nott up as well. I feel like the Patronus charm is quite an advanced spell for Tor to know at her age, but it does make sense that her father would have thought to teach it to her in his private training. I'm really intrigued about what animal her Patronus is! Will it be connected in some way to Terry's?
Tor and Pyxis were actually really sweet together in this chapter - an indication of how far back their friendship goes, and that's nice to see. I don't think Tor will be able to completely hide her relationship with Terry for much longer - at least, not without providing some sort of alibi - without people becoming suspicious. Her friends are already beginning to notice that something is going on, and it probably won't be long until others do to.
It was great to see them all get the chance to be the kids they are for once, rather than pretending to be adults in a world that's too dangerous for them. I loved the thought of them having the snowball fight, like normal teenagers, and escaping the darkness and responsibility placed on their shoulders because of who they are. They were all together as a group, too, which they'd probably be better as in the grand scheme of things instead of fighting amongst themselves.
That last line! How can you possibly finish a chapter like that? My mind is racing now with all the possibilities of who it could be. If it's one of the two people that Tor loves, then it's probably Daphne or one of the Nott boys. I know that Malfoy will still be alive at that point, since we see him in the books... my guess at the moment is that it's probably Theo, since he's getting involved in the Death Eaters (or so I suspect), and then Terry will be the other. It's so sad to think about!
Another great chapter, and I liked Derwent Dementor's appearance!
Author's Response: Hi again love! You always leave such incredible, thoughtful and detailed reviews and this is no exception. I'm so glad you liked the contrasts, since I wasn't sure if they were too different to include in the same chapter, but I'm pleased the snowball fight provided a nice break and change in the angsty tone of the story.
I've had the Azkaban scene in my head since the beginning, so it was great to finally have it written and validated. It's such an intense, horrible place for children to go, but of course seeing what happens to those who fail Voldy is very personal for these kids, especially with Theo and Pyxis seeing their father.
Yes, I imagined that since Tor is particularly skilled at mind control - like Voldy, in a way - that she might be able to control herself against the Dementors. However, I was also thinking that Tor hasn't technically lost anything yet in the war. She's in a difficult place and has hard decisions to make but is still quite lucky in that all her loved ones are safe. Pyxis and Theo, who have lost so much, would be even more affected by Azkaban than Tor in my mind.
I'm so glad you liked Carrow! I loved writing her, these villains are just too much fun. It's good to hear she fit with your head canon, and there will definitely be more conflicts with her in the future. And yes, Tor isn't really the keep calm and quiet type.
I know, poor Notts! :( It would have been awful, definitely, and I hope some of that desperation came across even in the boys who want to remain stoic. And we'll find out what her Patronus is... well, eventually...
Pyxis has turned into one of my favourite characters in this story somehow, and I love writing the depth of Tor's friendship with him. He is certainly starting to catch on, as others will as well. Hogwarts is a small place, and Tor will have some trouble figuring out how to deal with it. Poor girl, why do I put her through these things?! :P
Aw, I loved writing the snowball fight scene and letting them let loose for a little. Yes, they need to learn to stick together more and not be so suspicious and competitive. I enjoyed writing the group dynamics as well, and letting Malfoy act a little silly for once as well.
Ah, I love your predictions! :) Of course I can't say anything, but I hope to plant more clues in future chapters.
Yay for Derwent, I knew he would want to make a guest star appearance. :P Thank you for another wonderful review, and I'm very honoured you're still continuing to enjoy the story! :)