|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
A new Gubby story! It's fantastic to see that you're still writing! Your next-gen humour stories are always a joy to read. It's funny, though, because I don't read these kind of fics by any other author, but when you write them, I know they're going to include hilarious, but multifaceted characters who kick cliches aside and take over the world. :D And there's of course your perfect writing - you know all the right places to include one-liners and just the right amount of sarcasm. Your use of first-person is also fantastic - even though Augusta doesn't say all that much about herself, her voice comes through so strongly that I can hear it reciting the story. It has a great conversational tone about it that immediately drew me in. She has a lot of personality with plenty of snark to spare, but I guess that's what happens when you're friends James Potter. It's as though she works to make up for James's awkwardness - in this way, they already make a perfect pair.
I've never read a James/OC story before, but I love what you've done so far with this one, especially in the way that you've characterized James. The poor guy is as hopeless as he is dreamy. It reminds me a tiny bit of Sirius in the flashback of OotP where he doesn't notice the girls watching him, but in James II's case, it's more than he's absolutely clueless about it. He doesn't seem to know how to look at a girl romantically. From the anecdote about the family dog, I can see that he's got heart, and his strength in practical magic reminds me of his father - Harry was far from the best student and was pretty darn awkward in his social relationships. Augusta's narration makes it difficult to tell just how much personality James has, if any - he's the dictionary definition of a "nice person", and if he wasn't a Potter or incredibly handsome, he probably wouldn't be noticed at all.
There must be more to him than this. Augusta lists the facts, but I want to learn more about the substance. In other words, I'm intrigued by this story. And its characters. Thus I make the usual request of "please, sir, may I have some more?" It will be fantastic to see where you take this story!
Author's Response: Oh, I'm always writing! The question is just if it's worthy of posting. I'm still not sure this is, but I'm glad you have fun with my stupid next gen oc-centric humor stories because I do too! And yes, I realize there's not a lot from Augusta about herself (the original version from last year had a bit where she addresses this, not sure if I'll use it now) but I'm glad you get a sense of who she is anyway. Hehe I like the way you're thinking! She certainly babysits him enough that they are a very special pair already.
I've read... far too many next gen canon/oc stories to name, though not recently. And I knew from the beginning I couldn't stand to write a perfect, card-carrying member of The Hottest of the Hot Next Gen Canon Characters Club. So instead, he became a derpy idiot.
You've completely hit the nail on the head about the kind of person he is -- he's a totally ordinary Good Guy, thrust into a spotlight he doesn't know what to do with for reasons beyond his control. That's not to say he doesn't have personality (and it's not to say Augusta is the end all be all Expert in All Things James Potter). I'm thrilled that you want to see more of him and Augusta and the whole gang (there's always a whole gang) to come. I'm excited to see where this goes too, because I'm by no means sure... but hopefully it will be fun wherever it goes! Thank you for reading and sticking with me for all this time, Susan. You're a legend :D