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Review:SereneChaos says:
Oh my goodness. I'm absolutely floored by this story. I'm always interested in the way people present Salazar and Helga, and I think here in particular, I liked your middle-aged, married to someone else, versions of them. There's a great maturity in their thoughts that makes the romance (or never-to-be romance) all the more strong, and...gah, I just love it.

I've never seen anyone use this kind of format for a story before, and it worked fantastically here. I like the idea of them switching back and forth between thoughts the way old married couples (or soulmates!) can finish each other's sentences. Your transitions between points of view is seamless and I'm a little envious at how well you did them, lol. I also liked how towards the end the shifts in pov got smaller and smaller, sort of like a funnel where they meet together in the end.

All in all, this was a perfect story, even down to the structural backbone. Great work!

Author's Response: Hi Serene, thank you so much for coming! I love Helgazar too, as you know, and I thought it would be interesting to show them in this light; still in love, but with separate lives and spouses. I guess I was in an angsty mood *shrugs*

I'm glad you like the echoing thoughts. You're absolutely right, they are soulmates, and I imagined them being just so attuned to each other that their thoughts would flow together. It was a fun experiment, definitely!

Thanks for the lovely review! I'm so happy you liked it :D


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