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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! I've heard so much about this story, but never had the chance to read until now. George/Angelina is one of my favourite canon pairings, and I've come across many which are angsty or fluffy. Yours begins perfectly. It has a lovely balance of fluff and angst and drama, and I'm very happy to see that you didn't go overboard with the angst bit. Your writing was very light and easy to read, and your attention to detail was lovely.

The opening paragraph showing the dishevelled state of George's room really made me sad; it must've been a terrible thing to get used to for George, after sharing his whole life - including his bedroom - with his brother. The Weasleys are extraordinarily insulated from loneliness and solitude because of their closeness and their inseparability.

I love the bit with Ron as well. It's a lovely sibling moment there; of course, it's different from the sibling relationship between Fred and George, but it's still possibly a moment of comfort for George. There's a good dose of awkwardness from Ron, as he tries to tread carefully around George, but it ends nicely and casually.

And Angelina! That was a great beginning to their meeting! I can't wait to see how you'll further develop Angelina's character. Great work. This is a very lovely start. Your narrative is incredibly smooth and I was so engaged throughout the whole chapter.

-teh

Author's Response: It's always such a pleasant surprise to see a review from a new reader!! I've heard wonderful things about your reviews from other HPFF members, and I'm tickled pink by this one!

I'm very glad that you found the quality of my narrative to be smooth. I myself feel like I have a tendency to be a bit wordy and cumbersome at times, so this was a greatly appreciated bit of reassurance. Character crafting is one of the aspects of fiction that I love the most -- people and their relationships with each other is why I fall in love with stories, and so I try very hard to craft believable, three dimensional characters in my stories.

It was hard to get into George's head in this first chapter -- I too love George and Angelina and have read a number of stories about them, and I really wanted to avoid over-doing the angst since I'd seen that done time and time again. Of course he's bereaved by his twin's death, but he's still George and so thrives on life and living.

I certainly hope you continue reading and enjoying this story! I'd love to hear what you think of it, especially some of the later chapters.

Thank you so, so much!


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