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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

I have a question I meant to ask you in the last review (oops!): how does Rainne obtain her ciggarettes (spelling is a little wonky right now)? They're a Muggle item and she spends most of her time at Hogwarts... I can't imagine that there's a convenient place to purchase them.

Anyway, I, once again, really enjoyed this chapter. Rainne's thought process is absolutely fascinating (though it's also quite tragic). I really hope that someone truly tries to help her soon... Because of the time jumps it seems like she's become closer with more people and that they should be close enough to want to help her. But perhaps they can't see it just yet- she's doing a good job of hiding it and it's not like you look at people, expecting them to be hurting themself.

I did notice, though, that in the first section you switched from Rainne's perspective to Lily's quite a bit. I found that a little confusing, as "she" can refer to either one of them. :P I would suggest trying to stick to only one perspective per section. :)

The section in the room, with the memories of Rainne's mother, was really well done. You could definitely see both Rainne's sorrow and the love she has for her mother.

All in all, I think that this was another well done chapter. Great work! :D

Author's Response: she buys them in the bunch, i suppose. and being in the castle makes it a bit difficult to find a smoke break so she doesn't go through them very quickly :)
though rainne's sixth year will be a bit of a roller coaster, it's going to get better, that i can promise you :) she will slowly allow more people to enter her life and care for her.
drat, i was hoping that would work. the reason i'm writing in third person is so that i can show how everyone is thinking -- i'll definitely work on that.
thanks so much for all the reviews, i'm excited to see what you think of the next few chapters!


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