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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oh wow! This has become a lot more complicated than I expected, but it's fantastic how you've written these characters and their relationships. There is a lot to take into account with the next generation, and I really like what you've done - it's unlike anything I've read before with these characters, adding many more layers and reminding readers that there are different kinds of love. Although Rose and Teddy have a deep connection, Rose is able to recognize that it's not the kind of love that she actually wants - it doesn't give her the security and joy that being with Scorpius does. Yet she can't escape that she has some sort of feelings for Teddy - I think it's that they're so much alike. To a degree, Rose is able to use their similarities in her favour - she can ensure that she won't make the same mistakes that Teddy did, that she won't run away from responsibility, from life. On the other hand, Rose fears the similarities and connection she shares with Teddy because it reveals more about herself than she cares to know.

Ugh, it's a brilliant portrait of the next generation. Even the characters in the background are wonderfully sketched out, from the rather dorky, but sweet Scorpius to the quiet, but eye-roll worthy Molly. It was easy to become lost in the world you've created here. There was just one thing I want to know in terms of critique - you mention that Rose was in sixth year when Teddy and Victoire first kissed, yet at the end of DH James reports that Teddy and Victoire were kissing, and this would be in Rose's first year. That's getting very nit-picky of me, though. ;)

As in the previous chapter, your writing is of high quality, making this story a joy to read. I really hope that you continue writing it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love your reviews, they're so detailed :)

I was planning to sort of go backwards through their relationship with a few side stories in between, so as it gets closer to the start the relationship between them keeps building up in the reader's eyes. Hopefully it'll work ^_^

Yeah, out of the two I think Rose is the one who has grown up more because she knows when to put things in her past. There are those inescapable feelings for Teddy but she knows for sure what she wants by the end of this chapter.

I know, I made Rose older for the purpose of the story but I forgot to add it to the Author's notes (stoopid me), so I will do that now! Thank you for pointing that out though otherwise I would never have noticed. :D

And again, sorry for the ridiculously long wait in updating. I am a ridiculous human being and the next chapter is being written now :). Thanks again for your review! :D


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