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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

So- a time jump! That's probably for the best. Not only does it allow us to see the progression in Rainne's character, but also in James and Lily's relationship. It would be unlikely that their situations would change drastically over a few days and this allows us to look in on more significant moments- or simply moments that show the changes in their sitautions- as they progress over long periods of time.

Rainne's friendship with Ben is very interesting and I like how carefully you're navigating it. It would be impossible for Rainne to have any sort of bond without her questioning it, at least not at the stage in her life she's at. Hopefully, she can evenutally reach that moment.

The scene in the bedroom was also very interesting. I liked how you wrote Rainne's anxiety- it fits with Rainne's mindset at the moment.

James and Lily's relationship still isn't very good, I see... But perhaps it will become better once Lily gains a more active role in Rainne's life (I'm still holding on to my prediction from the first chapter).

I do have one question, though. "Carmen Pierson, her new best friend" - why is Carmen her new best friend? Her was her old one? I'd gotten the impression that they'd been friends for a long time... But then again, I suppose that friends is not the same thing as best friends.

All in all, I think that you're continuing to do a great job and I'm very interested to read the next chapter. Great work! :D

Author's Response: yes, i thought it would be best to skip a month or so, or it would get too slow, i think. rainne is obviously still very apprehensive due to all her insecurities, but her friends will help her through it :)
as for lily and carmen, lily's old best friend was snape up until the incident in fifth year where he called her a mudblood. then she severed (haha, get it, severed - severus) ties with him and found someone else.
once i get ta i'll edit that to make it more clear :)
thanks again!

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