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Review:patronus_charm says:
Ooh I think this has to be my favourite chapter so far!

I really liked how you made Lily have muggle medicine as it connected with her often-forgotten muggle roots which was nice to see! I did have to admit that I almost thought Jamesí influence had gone far enough to convince her to skive Potions, but Iím glad that she didnít because the consequences of that lesson were great!

I thought you wrote Slughorn really well and the overall potion making scene was well done. It was really entertaining and I didnít get bored at all which isnít something I can always say for school lessons!

The banter between James and Sirius when they tried the veritaserum was great! I really liked that James had only liked her since fourth year as that made a lot more sense in my head than in first year because who falls in love at the age of eleven? That would just be weird :P Then the fact he wears reindeer pyjamas is so cute!

I do have to admit that I preferred it when Lily was the one who was spilling the secrets mainly due to the one about whether she wanted to kiss James or not still Ė so cute! The scene which followed was brilliant! I liked that Snape made an appearance as a Marauder story without him is not a good one! He was perfectly in character being neither too mean but not too pitiful either.

The ending was great! You seem to have a habit of closing on a kiss but Iím not complaining at all!

-Kiana

Author's Response: I agree! I think a lot of the time James gets written as having liked Lily since first year, which just seems unrealistic to me. He was eleven. I'm not saying eleven year olds don't get crushes, but really? I'm glad you think it made sense!

I'm also really glad you liked the way I portrayed Snape. He's one of my least favorite characters in the series, so I think I can tend to be a bit hard on him outside fanfics, but I really try not to let that seep into my stories and make him much more unlikable than he was.

Thank you so much for your review!


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