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Review:Haronione says:
This was a really sweet chapter and I enjoyed reading it! I absolutely adore James/Lily :D

It was interesting to read the turmoil James was going through about his improving relationship with Lily. And I loved the fact that you had James doubting that it was love he felt for Lily. You did a really good job of writing the way James felt, and how he came to the decision that he was in love with her. I felt it was very realistic and the characterisation of James was great :)

This was well written and flowed well, making it an easy read. I did, however, notice a couple of small things - 'There also was nothing quite like...' I feel this would read better as 'There was also nothing quite like...' But that's just my opinion. And '...Lily Evans was one woman that he would the longest lengths for. the 'go' is missing between 'would' and 'the'. But these are just little things I noticed :)

I liked how the other Marauders were really very little help to James when deciding whether to ask Lily out again, with each of them giving different, conflicting advice. I could really see things like this happening frequently in the group :)

I also like the fact that it focused purely on James's inner thoughts, with no dialogue. I usually like a good balance of dialogue in fics, but it wasn't needed here. Good job!

Haronione :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! I wanted to make this more of James and Lily reflecting rather than anything else. I will definitely look back and fix those flaws! This is one of my stories that don't get as much attention so I haven't been focusing too much on fine-tuning them (which I should do, regardless) xD Thank you for pointing them out! and thank you for reading and reviewing!(:

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