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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi again!

Gah this chapter was so adorably cute! I really agree with Lily about the thing with James ditching his friends to be with her, not many guys I know would do that! I liked how he made her more light hearted though by encouraging her to go outside and enjoy it, so it shows that they both benefit one another in different ways.

I think it was just the simple things like what I mentioned above and James waiting for her that really made it such a cute story, it just made me want to aw all the way through because of it all. Then the I love you being on the tip of her tongue! *dies momentarily* why didn’t she just get it off her tongue and say it?

The scene in the snow was really sweet too! Snow instantly makes everything more romantic, in my opinion anyway, and it did it again here! I liked the way she’s bonding with Sirius too now as that was nice to see and it tied in well with canon. Then the kiss at the end. *fails* ♥ is all I can say for that!

The only tiny bit of CC I would give is that as this is a short story collection we’re bound to get a range of characters, but there was a Sarah and a Janes just thrown in there and I wasn’t really sure why. They only had a minor parts so I wouldn’t worry too much though.

Another great chapter, Branwen!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Yeah, I definitely drew on some of my experiences when I was writing this - that first 'I love you' can be so hard to say! :P

Thank you so much for your lovely review, and I'm so sorry it's taken me way too long to respond.


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