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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Hmm... That's an interesting choice you've made, to replace Peter with another character. Why did you do it? I understand that he made an absolutely awful choice in the books... But maybe he could have just not done that action here? :P I'm just curious.

Oooh- this is interesting. The interaction between James and Lily revealed a lot about their characters and where they are at this point in their relationship- well done! While Lily is still mostly annoyed by him, she's on good enough terms with him to actually attend a pool party he throws and then seek out his help in including Rainne. Something tells me that helping Rainne, and becoming her friend, will help Lily to see another side of James. :)

Rainne's reaction to the party seems very in character for her, from what we know of her. Hopefully nothing happens that makes her truly regret coming to the pool party... But what I'm really curious about is why she attended in the first place. What pushed her to actually go up to James' house and knock on the door?

I noticed two typos as I was reading that I thought I'd point out quickly. The first: with the phrase "Her and is", "and" should probably be "hand". The second: the phrase "the will" seems to be missing missing "party". :)

All in all, I think that you did another great job with this story. Nothing has moved along too quickly and I feel very curious to see how Rainne's relationships develop with everyone. Great work! :D

Author's Response: hmmm you'll see in chapters ahead why ben has replace peter ;) i'm sure you've already left a review about it!
i think rainne forced herself to go to the party because she doesn't want to be an outcast anymore. she is so lonely that, even though it's minimal, she's putting as much effort as she can into getting out into the world of friends and such.
ashhgasldk i know i have typos, i uploaded this chapter in a bit of a hurry. once i get trusted author i plan on going through and fixing everything. thanks for pointing them out though!
and thanks again for your reviews!


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