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Review:starryskies55 says:
Ahhh! This was a really cute exchange between the two of them. For some reason, I really liked that it was Lily rescuing James and being all 'so what I can sneak out at night as well you know'. It gave a bit more depth to her character, rather than being the usual goody two shoes that she's usually presented as. I enjoyed her confusion at Filch not being able to see two teenager shaped lumps under a blanket, it was quite funny as obviously the readers know it was the Invisibility Cloak, and James' pride and slight showing off of the Cloak- I thought it was very in character and quite funny too!

Despite there not being much of a plot, this was a well thought out and written piece. The premise to both of them being in the corridors was very believable, and I'm so glad you referenced the Death Eaters and Voldemort- so many Marauder stories forget about them, and it makes complete sense that the two of them would be very worried about what was happening outside Hogwarts.

One small bit of CC, this line; "maybe you're deserving of the Invisibility Cloak after all" seems a bit disjointed, I couldn't figure out why James said it or how it related to the rest of the story.
Overall though, I really enjoyed this! Short and sweet, and it definitely has the promise of a relationship and some romance *winks*

Author's Response: So glad I randomly logged onto my account and found these reviews! You seriously made my day! Just the fact that you took the time to read my stories and write such long reviews means so much to me :)

This was actually one of the first Jily stories I ever wrote, so it was really fun to explore Lily and James' characters.

It's also been really important for me to consider the Voldemort aspect of my stories because I think it is such an important part of the characters. I love writing short little love stories (and I write a lot of them), but I think it's also important to realize that they were going through something incredibly serious and that it shapes who they are. I cannot wait to fully explore that in my multi-chapter Neville/Hannah fic!

Also, thank you for the bit of criticism! I always appreciate honest feedback. As for that line, I think it was one of those cases where I wrote it down earlier and really loved it so I struggled to part with it in the final draft. I totally see your point about it not belonging, though. (I think I was trying to make a connection between Lily being a bit of a troublemaker like James and how that meant she deserved the ultimate troublemaker object AKA the cloak)

Again, thank you for writing a review :)

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