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Review:patronus_charm says:
Yeah Iím back again but Iím stalking your Jily stories this time round!

The dialogue in this just ♥ it was superb! I could sense the tension between them with all of my sense which isnít something that happens all that often so hear it was just wonderful. The bitterness of Lily towards James was so well written. I liked the fact that she was challenging him and his word as it was a bit of girl power though it probably defeats the purpose of the challenge!

The structure of this story was really great too and the way it was broken up into little parts seemed to symbolise the disjointedness of their relationship and how fractured it was. You not only encompass great style into your work but structure too and that something I always admire about your pieces!

I never imagined Lily as a killer but your slightly darker portrayal of her here really fitted with it and it made sense. I liked how you she connected with her conscious at that part as it showed that she was still human though she hadnít appeared like that for much of the one-shot and it made me like her more. The comparison to the fallen angel was really great and it can almost be used with Jamesí view too because he used to admire her but after this he may not so sheís fallen in his view.

That line which James said but sounded like Dumbledore was really great. It sort of bonded them together and Dumbledoreís wiseness carried them through and showed that in times like these arguing is frivolous and they need to find Caradoc though it may be futile in a case like his.

Though it sounds horrible I liked the fact that James had to kill because it binded him and Lily together as they were both broken or fallen however you wish to see it and that final section when he was asking her about what it felt like was really powerful. I thought this was an excellent study of their pairing!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you for stopping by again! It's great that you're taking the time to read through my older one-shots - I really appreciate hearing your feedback. ^_^

Oh wow, I'm really glad to hear that you like the dialogue in this one, as well as the tension between Lily and James. That's what I wanted to emphasize in this story was how their initially strained relationship develops, not during their final year at Hogwarts, but in the year after they graduate (and thankfully canon is so murky that I could just, just get away with it :P). There was a lot in canon about how they worked together against Voldemort, yet it's harder to find fics that look closely at their partnership in this respect - they're all about the romance rather than the trust and mutual strength they would have required to go up against Voldemort three times. Lily fights against James to assert her place, not as the girl of his dreams, but as his equal, someone with actually more at stake in this war.

It's interesting how it's much harder for fans to see the "good" characters as being capable of killing, yet they had to kill to survive. Harry stands out because he refuses to kill anyone, even Voldemort - it's regarded as an anomaly in the Potterverse that he decides to do so. It's not only what makes him capable of defeating Voldemort - who is literally killed with Harry's goodness - but it's why he's lauded as a different kind of hero. There's nothing in canon that suggest that other characters, including Lily and the Marauders, did the same. If they'd not killed any Death Eaters, then the magical world would have been overrun in no time. What differs for Lily is that she feels guilt, even at the death of someone who would have killed her without a second thought - it disturbs her that she has to go to such lengths to ensure not only her survival, but also that of the magical world.

Yes! That's exactly it! By the end of this, they are true partners in everything - even though it comes at a horrible cost, it links their fates and makes them see one another in an entirely new way, one that easily blossoms into respect and love. They are each capable of greatness on their own, but together, they are even stronger - that's what makes the Lily/James ship what it is.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story! Your review has made me appreciate this story a lot more, and I appreciate it! ^_^


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