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Review:starryskies55 says:
Hey! Despite this being quite a short piece, I found this really captivating and interesting. I've read tons of one shots of this particular moment, but you've managed to put your own spin on it- I think mostly helped by the fact you've used second person, which I know is very tricky, but you've done it very well, I think! :)

James and Lily's relationship, while it was only briefly described in here, was still quite powerful. The idea that she didn't want to live without James was very sad but was effective in showing their love for each other. The bit where Lily is lamenting all the things she can never do with James again made her sound very young and vulnerable, which is a brilliant portrayal of her, as she was extremely young still when she died.
You have some brilliant description in here as well, I especially loved the bit at the end where everything seemed so pointless and hopeless, like "You yell, but itís hopeless." and the no-one caring line. It really added to Lily feeling alone after she knew James was dead, and the empty life she would have without him.

Quick note; watch out for your formatting. :) But overall, this was a fantastic story, and I really enjoyed it. Well done!

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