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Review:nott theodore says:
Hello! I'm here reviewing my OTP!

So first of all, I absolutely hate this moment in time. Reading about it is really difficult and I really admire anyone who manages to write about it, because it just tears me up inside. Writing about it as well as you've done here is very impressive as well, especially considering that you wrote this for the Every Word Counts challenge, and so you have to convey a lot with a small number of words.

There's so much emotion in this story from the first word to the last, and that's a very hard thing to do, but this story and moment definitely needs that emotion. I could really feel Lily's terror at the beginning of the story when she doesn't know what is happening and can't get away, like James told her to. Then comes the utter despair which follows when she realises that James has died, and that there's nothing she can do to protect her son and save him from the evil that is Voldemort. I could really empathise with her here, and in such a short story, that's a great thing to achieve.

There was some lovely imagery and description in this one-shot as well. The flashes of green light that peek through the door are one of my favourite examples. But at the same time, you strike the balance brilliantly, not over-using description at all.

You've done a brilliant job with this. It was very powerful and poignant, and I loved it!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! I know it's difficult; I had planned to write this one-shot for the longest time but I always put it off because it's so hard, especially since Jily is also my OTP.
I once saw a post on Tumblr about how hard it must have been for Lily to hear her husband died and ever since I saw that, that always resonated with me, Lily knowing James had died. It was difficult to write through that part!

Anyways; thank you SO much for reading and for reviewing! (:


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