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Review:Johnny Nightmare says:
I have waited until reading this last chapter to give feedback because i wanted to make my comments on the story as a whole. Overall I think you did a great job and i cant wait for more chapters. With that being said i do have a couple things that i think you should reflect upon. Number One: i don't think you should have had harry and ginny cheat on eachother. The scandal was a nice touch but you handled it wrong. What I would have done is have Harry prove his love for Ginny by taking the girl that was stalking him and the Daily Prophet to the Wizengamot and sued them for stalking and printing false stories. Once he got his restraining order two things will happen. Ginny would be reassured about harrys love and it would send a message to the wizarding community that harry did not want anyone to meddle in their relationship. They wanted no one else because all they needed was each other. Number Two: Now that you have established that they officially cheated on each other i think you should cut harry a break and get them back together. Its kind of like you are torturing him by drawing this messy thing out. If harry didnt have little teddy for comfort he would probably down a bunch of painkillers and a bottle of firewhisky just to be done with it. Please get them back together. Number Three: Bring a little more action into the story at some points. I know you said that you are not very good at writing action scenes but you are a lot better than you think. Keep writing them and youll get more confident at it and your work will flourish. Number four: I think that once you get harry and ginny back together i think that you should start skipping through the years to important events such harry proposing to ginny and ron proposing to hermione and then devoting that whole year in which they prepare for a double wedding. Both couples decide to get married at the same time because for them it would be the ultimate act of love, loyalty, and friendship. After that just go ahead and skip to parts of the nineteen years that would be important, you dont want the story get too cut and dry. I hope you consider my take on this. With the way you wrote these chapters so far im sure that you could make a beatiful story. I am looking forward to more chapters and hope maybe to start my own fanfic soon. I know its gonna be hard because i may have good ideas but i have trouble writing creatively. Good job on the fanfic keep an eye out for one by a guy named johnny nightmare.

Author's Response: Well, I am glad that you're enjoying the story and I hope you will continue to do so :) I also appreciate your suggestions, but I also hope you can understand why I chose to write it this way. They are both still young and will make mistakes, and since this is the first time they've really had time for a love life, things are bound to get complicated. I know that most people look forward to seeing them back together and they're getting there, I promise. As for Harry, he's not very happy, but I don't think it would ever go that far. He's just feeling sorry for himself, but things will turn around soon. There will be a little more action soon, as well. I'm actually not going to do the thing where I skip through the years, but it's a nice idea if you ever want to write a story like that yourself :) I also like the idea of a double wedding, but it's not going to happen like that in my story (I've already written the weddings and everything, I have so much written already!). So, you have some interesting ideas, but I do hope you'll like my version of their story as well, and good luck with your own writing! You certainly have the ideas down, and as for writing, just begin! It might take a little work in the beginning, but I'm sure you'll do fine. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, and I hope you'll stick with this story even if it won't be exactly what you wanted ;)

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