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Review:marauderfan says:
KIANA WHAT IS THIS ENDING??? D-:

Jk. It just adds to the suspense. But omg. I'm glad to hear the next chapter is nearly done, because I'm dying to continue reading!

I love the characterization of Lorcan in this! And how he's just candidly asking Scorpius about Rose. Its great because it seems just a little Luna-ish, the way he's that direct about it. So great job with him.

I also really enjoyed your description of the sandstorm, all the little details you added were really nice, like how you focus on the light and the particular sand grains. Its lucky for that group that their tent is so good, being a muggle and taking a tent in the desert is a disaster. Nice that magic can keep the heat and the sand out :P (Also, bunk beds! Can you tell I want a wizard tent, they just sound so cool!)

Lastly, what a perfect chapter to post at this point with the house cup going on, since it's about travelling! ;)

I just thought I'd point out that there are a couple of small grammar/spelling issues here and there - like you used "reigns" instead of "reins", but those should be an easy fix if you eventually go back to do a quick edit. Overall I loved this chapter and I am really looking forward to the next one. 10/10

Author's Response: I would say I'm sorry about the ending, but I'm really not!

I really hope to have the next chapter up before I go on holiday (23rd) but I need to post some other ones first, so I guess I'll have to wait and see!

I'm so glad that you loved Lorcan! I really adore writing him because Luna's one of my favourite characters so I can put my own spin of Luna on him.

Yay you liked the description! I always worry I go into too much depth, but hearing that makes me just want to write even more! I've never taking a tent to a desert but I have taken one to a field which wasn't much fun, so I agree with you about it being great that them being magical.

Haha, I know I've been writing quite a few chapters for this. I suppose the theme's been powering me on!

Ew typos - the bane of my life. I thought I had gotten rid of them all but I guess not :( I'll do another read through for them. Thanks for a great review! ♥

-Kiana


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